Very good and structured introduction to Sungkyungkwan, great read! The only things I would recommend are the following:

1) Please take care about the prepositions. In some places, you were missing the needed preposition and the sentence can become a bit confusing.

2) Just a detail, but can be important: be sure that the English rewriting of Korean names are consistent. If you use one form for Dongjae, be sure that this is used in this form everywhere in the essay.

All in all, I like your attention to detail and that your explanations are complex.