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Hello! A great, detailed essay about the Gyeongbokkung palace! I really like the way you take time to explain parts of the palace in details. In order for it to be even better, however, please try to focus on the following issues: 1) Some of your sentences are super long. It's better to divide them into several smaller sentences 2) Try to avoid sentences like "The party and reception place was for parties and receptions" (It is like saying Korean food is Korean). Instead, go into more details, or just say "Gyeonhoeru was a place for parties and receptions" Great job! |
