Good Job Yu-ri-ya! :) I am so proud of you and happy that you write an essay ever month. It's very great that you talk about whom you like the most, Yu Gwan Sun. In addition, you write how you felt in Seo-dae-mun Prison and what kind of lesson you learned from the class! Great!!

Here is some of things I would like to correct for you to get better.

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She was a student at Ehwa Women's school

and when Japanese government made all the shcool to close, she went bact to her hometown

and started to join on demonstration on March 1st. (Because of this) Yu Gwan sun was imprisoned in the Seo dae mun prison.

Even inside the prison, she kept shouting independence of Korea.

Unable to bear a torture of Japenese, she died in the prison in her age 18.

There are many patriots except for(-->including) Yu Gwan sun, and I felt angry to Japan

of harass our nation (of harassment of our nation, or Japan who harassed our nation) for a long time.

I think we should remember this sad history and be thank(be thankful, or thank) you to

our ancestors who protect(protected) Korea even they could get a death(->be dead or get killed).

Thank you!